I've pinched, plucked, tweaked, rearranged and fluffed this chapter into the consistency of mashed potatoes. And you know what? It still sucks!
After an hour of going through this today, I finally tossed down my pen. I got up, poured another cup of coffee, and reached for the index cards. Now for the nitty gritty. I'm going to completely restructure this scene. First things first, this is what I have to know:
1. Who is this scene about?
2. What is he doing when the scene opens?
3. Why is he there, and what is his goal for this scene?
4. How does he feel about it: happy, sad, content, angry, frustrated? List anything he's struggling with, whether internal or external conflicts.
5. Who is there with him, and does he like this person?
6. What CHANGES suddenly to throw this comfortable little scene off kilter?
These are the questions I'm working on in order to complete my scene. If you'll notice, the questions are color coded and grouped into sections two each. That's because every scene should have a beginning, a middle, and an end.
Once I figure out what the hell my hero is actually doing, I should have this one in the bag. At the moment, he is emo-ing himself out in a vaccuum of space somewhere in north-east Louisiana. Exciting, no?
Well, I'm about to hit him with a big fish, and tell him to get over it. Wish me luck!